IE3 Spring 2013: Lesson 7

5/28/2013

Hi everyone,

I can't believe we're half way through the semester!

Revising and Editing:
In today's class, we learned about revising and editing. When you revise, you correct the content and structure of your research paper. When you edit, you correct grammar and style mistakes.

You then have some time to work on your peer editing task. For this task, you will revise/edit your partner's concluding paragraph. You need to complete the following for this task:

complete the Peer Editing Worksheet
make revision corrections (using blue pen) on your partner's paragraph
make editing corrections (using red pen) on your partner's paragraph
Make a copy of the worksheet and your partner's concluding paragraph (with your corrections)

Conferences:
For our lesson on June 5, we will be having conferences. You will be able to discuss your first drafts with me in an individual meeting during class while other students revise/edit their drafts. Make sure you prepare your list of questions for me before our conferences.

Computer Room for June 5 (1st period):
For our conferences, we'll be in the computer room 15402, so remember to bring a USB and your Aogaku ID card to access the computers.

Homework:
1. Discussions
2. Blog Comment #5
3. Journal Topic #5: an achievement (達成)
4. Peer Editing Task
5. Prepare for conferences
6. Bring to class next week:

your peer editing task (and a copy for me)
your Aogaku ID card (to use the computers)
a USB with your essay file on it (to revise/edit in the computer room)

Blog Question #5:

What did you think of the peer editing task?

*Write 8-10 sentences.
*Use capitalization, punctuation & spelling correctly.
*Submit by Tuesday, June 4 by 6:00pm.

18 Comments

IE3T-Hideyo

6/1/2013 12:53:14 pm

In peer editing task, I found that I can't do it completely. For one reason, my grammatical ability is imperfect. I still make much grammatical mistakes on my essay so I think it is difficult for me to correct other's
mistakes. I'm afraid that some of my correction is "not correct". Secondly, I think summarize skill is also important. I feel that this essay is very constructive and I have to avoid unnecessary sentences. In conclusion, there are summaries of each parts so I have to check whole essay and need to know what the writer emphasize. It was a little bit difficult for me to summarize the important sentences. In peer editing task, I need to develop both my grammatical and
summarize skills.

IE3T-Miki

6/2/2013 04:13:28 am

I knew the peer editing task is so hard and instructive task. I have to make good use of dictionary. Still I used dictionary, I'm afraid that my editing may have mistakes. Not only dictionary, I used a grammar book. Still uneasiness dosen't fade away. These work are so hard for me but are so instructive. By peer editing task, I can acquire grammer knowledge correctly. Moreover, I can know other's writing form which are different from mine. So, I think that peer editing task is hard but really instructive.

IE3T-Madoka

6/2/2013 07:00:06 pm

I can't say that my knowledge of my grammar is perfect, so peer editing task was difficult for me. My pertner is a retunee student. Therefore, it was hard to edit her writing because her grammatical skill is better than me. If I think this is an error, but I also think at the same time my knowledge is an error. This time, I felt peer editing task will be usefil for me because I looked up a grammar in a dictionary or a grammar book many times. The practice is a good lesson than study in a textbook. Through this work, I thought I should study more about English grammar. If so, it will be easier to edit other people's writing.

IE3T-Eriko

6/2/2013 09:59:32 pm

I am anxious about whether I can do the peer editing task. Because I have never experienced checking other people’s text and I have no confidence in my English ability. However, I think the peer editing task is an effective way to study English. I will be more careful about grammar and structure of essay when I edit friend’s essay. At the same time, that reminds me what I should be careful when I write my essay. Also I am not good at expressing myself in English, so I want to learn various ways of expression from the peer editing. The peer editing task is not so easy for me, but it will make my writing skill better.

IE3T-Shiori

6/2/2013 11:45:57 pm

My knowledge and skill is not perfect, so peer editing task was helpful for my skill up. It was very difficult but it is a good way of improve my English. Through to find my parents some point, I can learn skill up points.
At the same time, I can find some points that have to be careful when I write my essay. This time, actually I use my dictionary many times. However, I got knowledge through peer edit task. This work was not definitely easy. It took a long time to edit but it effort will make my skill better. Peer editing task is very important work for us.

IE3T-Hitomi

6/3/2013 12:36:44 am

I thought the peer editing task was good way to learn writing English for some reasons. First, it made me a chance to read other's essay carefully. The chance was rare for me because in Japan, at least around me, almost people were ashamed of showing their writing. If there are such opportunities, we will be able to get something good from friends'. Furthermore, I felt that I have to study so much that I can correct mistakes easily. I think it is a big step when people study something. The task was difficult but I was sure that it will be useful for me.

IE3T-Asami

6/3/2013 07:24:19 am

I felt the peer editing task was really a hard work for me. Because my English grammar skill is not perfect, therefore I'm not sure of my peer editing task whether to make some mistakes or not. Also, I had to understand what the writer wanted to describe and make sure of the important parts in the essay through reading whole contents. It was the most difficult thing because If I don't those clearly, my revision might make a difference of writer's opinion. I needed to read the essay many times. However, I really feel the peer editing task has a vital role for me, too. I can notice what part is apt to make mistakes through taking an objective view. Therefore, I think the peer editing task can give me great ability in writing an essay.

IE3T-Haruka

6/3/2013 02:51:52 pm

I am not confident with my grammar and knowledge so, it was hard work for me to do the peer editing. It was difficulty to tell weather it is a mistake or not. Although since I was not confident I spent a lot of time looking at the dictionary so I gained a lot of new knowledge and skills. Also, my partners topic was very interesting and I enjoyed reading her essay. It was my first experience to edit someones essay but I learned many new things.I fell thankful about this assignment.

IE3T-Nao

6/3/2013 03:01:21 pm

I thought peer editing is good to improve my writing skils. I had never read draft carefully, so I discovered and learned many things from peer editing. I want to refer to my partner's good points. She is good at summerizing and rephrasing. I feel it is important to make interesting and persuasive essay.Through peer editing I become think I have to study more and more to reduce making mistakes and be correct patner's essay precisely. It is beneficial to edit essay each other. I want to continue doing peer editing from here on.

IE3-T Konomi

6/3/2013 03:15:42 pm

I thought it is really hard to me to peer edit to the other person's essay. Because I have no confidence to my grammar skill. So when I read someone's essay, I feel like it is everything correct. So it is difficult to find some mistakes on that essay. Also, I've never often edit my friend's essay so it is almost my first time to peer edit an essay. I was really afraid because I feel it has big responsibility. However, now I think it is good way to know how the other person write an essay. It tells good advice for me about writing an essay. So now i don't feel a big responsible for it. I want to practice to peer edit more and more and I want to make use of my writing skill.

IE3T-Misaki

6/3/2013 03:41:17 pm

I think the peer editing task is very hard for me, because my grammer skill and knowledge is not perfect.
I spent a lot of time to do this work. Also,I felt difficulty to find mistake. I can be aware of important points through finding some mistake. It is need for me to improve my English. I think this work is hard task but I think it is greate oppotunity to read my peer's essay. My partner wrote a nice essay, I want to write good essay that people can feel interesting. So, I should progress my ability of my English.

IE3T-Anna

6/3/2013 04:01:20 pm

Through this week's assignment, I found that peer editing was very difficult. One of the reasons were because I counld not understand the writer's thought completely. When correcting her mistake, I did not know what she was really trying to say so I was afraid that I was not correcting them in a way that Professor Takeday would. Another reason I found this task hard was because I did not want to hurt my friend's feeling by correcting small mistakes. I do understand that to help my friend, correcting them are the best way, but at the same time I did not want her to take it personally. Although I did not enjoy this task, I found many ways of writing that I would not have used, so it was a plus to me too.

IE3T-Wakako

6/3/2013 04:55:00 pm

For me, peer editing is so difficult that I am not sure that I did well. I think to improve my peer editing skill, I should do it more. So, this is the first time to do peer editing, I would like to make more opportunities to do it. Further more, I also want to improve my essay wiring skills. I came up with this idea during my peer editing. I think peer editing can be a motivation to write. Now my skill of writing essay is not enough, so I want to write more essays.

IE3T-Chika

6/3/2013 05:54:21 pm

I thought peer editing was good English practice for me. First, I could know new expressions from partner's essay. Also, there were words that I hadn't know, so I could learn them. However, it was difficult finding the partner's mistakes. At first, I couldn't judge which is mistake or not. But to use a dictionary and to correct mistakes were also my practice. Finally, I enjoyed the correction because I felt like I'm a teacher. In conclusion, it was good for me and I enjoyed correcting the partner's mistakes.

IE3T-Yuri W

6/3/2013 06:05:46 pm

I thought the peer editing is a bit difficult for me. It is because my English is not perfect, so I felt it’s nonsense that I check somebody’s essay. Now, what I felt mostly difficult for English is grammar, and I still make grammatical mistakes for my essay.　However I thought those kinds of things, it is a good time that I see somebody’s good writing and utilize it for my essay. I　remembered when going to International school. I always copied how everybody pronounce or write. That was how I improved my English was. So I think it is a good time that I can get what my problem point is by peer editing task.

Yuri K

6/3/2013 06:37:12 pm

I thought peer editing task is very difficult. It was very hard to find grammar mistakes, it's because of a lack of my English grammar skill. When reading my friend'sessay, I was confused to find errors becase it looks all corect if I read it over and over again. And also when reading it, I couldn't tell that the mistake that I found is absolutely wrong or not. I thought it is harder than writing essay.

6/3/2013 06:46:41 pm

IE3-Natsumi

6/6/2013 07:49:08 pm

I think peer working is so good way to notice own mistakes. When I was check my peer's draft, I found her mistakes, and at the same time, I found a lot of own mistakes. Also I thought that I'll be careful not to mistake, and confirm by myself next because the friend of mine see my draft! If I check my essay carefully by myself before handing in, it will be more good one,so I want to continue to confirm my friend's draft and mine.

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